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**The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.** **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**

**The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.** **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**
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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of
people
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 living in cities in four Asian countries namely the Philippines,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020 with projections for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 , generally,
Malaysia
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 accounted for the first
rank
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 in the proportion of crowds during those years.Indonesia showed the lowest figure for the population from 1970 to 2000.
However
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,
Thailand
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 will be expected to
the
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have the
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 lowest percentage of
people
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 in 2040.
Malaysia
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 showed an upward trend and the second
rank
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 for
proportion
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the proportion
a proportion
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 of
people
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 stood at 30% in 1970 which
is
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was
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 followed by a slight
increase
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 in 2000.
Then
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, substantial growth was shown and It will be projected that
Malaysia
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 will experience the highest number of
people
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 in 2040 with 80%. The Philippines had the highest number of
people
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 in 1970 at about 31% .
Then
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 it remained stable until 1980 followed by a considerable
increase
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 in 1990 when a sudden decline occurred until 2010.
Although
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 a minor
increase
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 was shown in 2010,the Philippines will be expected to have about 55% in 2040 standing at third
rank
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.
Thailand
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 showed an upward trend standing at about 19% in 1970 which was followed by a slight
increase
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 until 1990.
Then
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, until 2020, remained unchanged.
Thailand
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 will be projected to stand at 45% in 2040. Indonesia, had the lowest
rank
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 about 10% in 1970 followed by substantial increases until 2040.
Thailand
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 will be expected the second
rank
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about 60% in 2040 after
Malaysia
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, malaysia, thailand, rank, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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