IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

**The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.** **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**

**The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.** **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**
#**the #information #percentage #population #four #asian #countries #cities #predictions #**summarise #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of
people
 living in cities in four Asian countries namely the Philippines,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
, and Indonesia between 1970 and 2020 with projections for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 , generally,
Malaysia
 accounted for the first
rank
 in the proportion of crowds during those years.Indonesia showed the lowest figure for the population from 1970 to 2000.
However
,
Thailand
 will be expected to
the
Add a missing verb
have the
show examples
 lowest percentage of
people
 in 2040.
Malaysia
 showed an upward trend and the second
rank
 for
proportion
Add an article
the proportion
a proportion
show examples
 of
people
 stood at 30% in 1970 which
is
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
 followed by a slight
increase
 in 2000.
Then
, substantial growth was shown and It will be projected that
Malaysia
 will experience the highest number of
people
 in 2040 with 80%. The Philippines had the highest number of
people
 in 1970 at about 31% .
Then
 it remained stable until 1980 followed by a considerable
increase
 in 1990 when a sudden decline occurred until 2010.
Although
 a minor
increase
 was shown in 2010,the Philippines will be expected to have about 55% in 2040 standing at third
rank
.
Thailand
 showed an upward trend standing at about 19% in 1970 which was followed by a slight
increase
 until 1990.
Then
, until 2020, remained unchanged.
Thailand
 will be projected to stand at 45% in 2040. Indonesia, had the lowest
rank
 about 10% in 1970 followed by substantial increases until 2040.
Thailand
 will be expected the second
rank
Change preposition
by
show examples
about 60% in 2040 after
Malaysia
.
Submitted by Maral.qanbarii1992 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, malaysia, thailand, rank, increase with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: