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In some countries students are required to learn a foreign language but in other countries it is not necessary to do so. Discuss the benefits of each case and give your opinion.

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There have been ongoing debates
whether
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 it is essential for some
nations
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nation's
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 learners to study a foreign
language
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 or not.
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, before arriving
on
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at
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 a decision, both views will be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, learning a new
language
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 can bring
skill
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skills
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 and more opportunities.
In other words
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, If
students
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 are gaining
skill
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skills
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of
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in
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 different
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language
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languages
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, it will enhance opportunities for them in different fields of
job
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jobs
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. To illustrate,
According to
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 recent data
by
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the times
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times new roman
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 newspaper,
that
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apply
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there has rapid
increament
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increase
in
number
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a number
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 of
students
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 who got
offer
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offers
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 from developing companies by learning a new
language
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 like
french
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French
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.
Thus
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,
new
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a new
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language
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 can bring various
carrer
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career
 opportunities to uplift the future of
students
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.
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, it can be
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burden
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 for learners to learn a foreign
language
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. To explain, Since the tasks of studies
has
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 increased, learners are feeling
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burden
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 on themselves.
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, In India, there are 7 subjects in every class and they have to do homework
also
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. So, learning a different
language
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 for Indian
students
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 is not
piece
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a piece
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 of cake.
Hence
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, It can cause
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burden
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 for
students
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 to learn a new
language
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. In conclusion,
Although
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 in some nations it is important to make
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 a part of daily life, in my opinion,
students
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 should focus on
there
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 studies
instead
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 of learning
new
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a new
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language
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 to mitigate
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burden
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the burden
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from
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on
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 themselves.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadening horizons
  • cognitive abilities
  • competitive edge
  • global economic opportunities
  • cultural understanding
  • empathy
  • academic burden
  • stress-free education
  • in-depth studies
  • advancements and innovation
  • balanced approach
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