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The graph show teh number of tourists viositing a particular carribiean island between 2010 2017. Summarize the information by selecting main feature and make comparison where relavent.

The graph show teh number of tourists viositing a particular carribiean island between 2010 2017. Summarize the information by selecting main feature and make comparison where relavent.
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The given line chart illustrates the
number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting a specific Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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of
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to
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 that particular Caribbean
island
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 experienced an upward trend.
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,
visitors
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 preferred staying on
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island
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the island
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 rather than staying on cruise ships. In 2010, approximately 1
million
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tourists
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 visited the Caribbean
island
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, and it showed an increase throughout the period. In 2016, the
number
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 of
tourists
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of
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 that
Carribean
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Caribbean
island
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 increased to around 2.7
million
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, and in the next year 2017, the
number
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 of
tourists
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reahched
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reached
 roughly 3.5
million
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. In 2010, around 0.3
million
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visitors
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 preferred staying on cruise ships, and with a slight increase in 2011, which was approximately 0.5%
million
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, it experienced a decline to around 0.3
million
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.
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, after that, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships experienced an increase, and in 2017,
this
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number
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 reached roughly 2
million
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. Meanwhile, 0.7
million
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tourists
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 preferred staying on
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island
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an island
the island
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 in 2010.
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, from 2013 to 2015,
this
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number
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 stabilized and stands at around 1.5
million
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.
Then
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, after a slight decline in 2016, it reached around 1.5
million
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 in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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