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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.
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give
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the survey
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 asked by 100 individuals who stayed in
Parkway
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the Parkway
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Hotel
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two certain years, 2005 and 2010.
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, it is noticeable that almost all
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services
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mentioned
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hotel
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had
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 been improved because they have answered
positivly
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positively
.
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according
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previous year,
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 of
hotel
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answsered
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answered
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 received satisfactory
services
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, recording the biggest part. The second largest percentage of people was 21%, making up approximately 21%.
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proportion
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 of poor and very poor
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also
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 other with 15% and 14%, respectively. Regarding the remaining information in
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 year, the ratio of individuals who there are good
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 in
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hotel less
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hotels
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 tripled compared to the
former
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previous
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 year and indicated the greatest ones among the quality of
services
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. The figure for excellent was the most dramatically considerable factor, which was from 5% in 2005 to 28% in 2010.
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, roughly 17% of customers said that
services
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 significantly decreased, by dropping around a triple.
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