Some people believe that parents should choose the degree or the major for their child to study at university. Others feel that children should be able to choose their own degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Parents
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always think better for their
children
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and
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why they want
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the best
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for them. As a matter of fact,
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many people believe that
children
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must choose their own professional
degree
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.
Howerver
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However
,
children
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are now more
capabale
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capable
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of deciding
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about their future and
parents
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are less aware
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of
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new professional degrees.
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, I think our new generation has more knowledge about what they are good
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it
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at
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because the
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facility has provided them with a lot of information. They know much better, which professions are going to help them in the up-coming future. Obviously, now a lot of online platforms
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example, Instagram , Facebook and Artificial intelligence provide them with better options to select their professions. As far as I am concerned,
parents
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have no idea about how to choose the
degree
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for their own
children
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. They are still using
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orthodox
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approaches to
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what is better for their future and one of the most common
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is, they ask
from
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others what is
better
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degree
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program for their
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.
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, they will ask other relatives and
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result
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the kid will not be achieving his goals. In my opinion, I totally concur with the fact that every young person must select his own professional
degree
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, and with the help of
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the internet
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internet
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he must properly research what is better for them. In
my
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conclusion, In
this
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new and innovative time we are living in , I believe
children
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must start to make their own decisions.
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,
parents
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must support them at any cost and let them make
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of
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about
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their own lives.
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