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Some people think that public transit should be accessible to all, even if this means higher taxes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
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 of making public transportation accessible to
everyone
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 is a topic that many
people
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 have different opinions about. Some think it’s important, even if it means we have to pay more taxes. I partly agree with
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idea
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 because it has both good and bad points. On the positive side, when public
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 is easy for
everyone
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 to
use
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, it helps a lot of
people
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.
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, old
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, disabled
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, and poor
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 who can’t afford cars can still go to work, visit friends, or go shopping.
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 makes life fairer for
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.
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, if more
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use
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 buses and trains
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 of cars, it can help reduce pollution in cities, which is good for
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’s health.
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, there are some problems with
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idea
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 too. The main issue is that making all public
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 accessible might cost a lot of money.
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 could mean that taxes go up, and not
everyone
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 will be happy about paying more, especially if they don’t
use
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 public
transport
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 often. Some
people
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 might think it’s unfair to pay for something they don’t
use
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 much. Another point to consider is that even if public
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 is made accessible, some
people
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 might still prefer to
use
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 their cars.
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 means that all the money spent on improving public
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 might not be used as much as we hope. In conclusion, I think making public
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 accessible for
everyone
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 is a good
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, but we need to think carefully about how to do it without making taxes too high. Maybe we could find other ways to pay for it, like getting businesses to help or using money from other areas. It’s important to find a balance between helping
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 and not putting too much pressure on taxpayers.
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