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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the
number
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 of
households
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 in the US based on their yearly income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. In 2007, the majority of the population in the United States,
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approximately 29
million
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households
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, gained annual income beyond 100
thousand
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dollars
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.
This
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number
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 was followed by
households
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 with 25 to 50
thousand
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dollars
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 and less than 25
thousand
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dollars
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, at 27 and 25
million
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households
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, approximately.
Lastly
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,
households
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 which had their revenue ranged from 50 to 75
as well as
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 75 to 100
thousand
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dollars
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 stood at the fourth and the fifth
positions
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.
However
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, in 2011, some major changes occurred, where the
number
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 of
households
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 with 25 to 50 and less than 25
thousand
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dollars
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 managed to take the first and second
positions
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, respectively, accounting for about 29 and 28
million
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.
Households
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 with revenue higher than 100
thousand
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dollars
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 were dragged to the third position,
while
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 the other two lowest stayed in the same position, with minor changes in their
number
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. Even though the aforementioned two groups had managed to take the two highest
positions
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, in 2015,
households
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 with income higher than 100
thousand
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dollars
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 came back to dominance at 33
million
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. The rest of the groups stayed in the same rank, despite some minor changes in their
number
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. In conclusion,
households
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 which had earnings higher than 100
thousand
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dollars
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 were the highest in the US, except in 2011, when those with revenue range from 25 to 50 and below 25
thousand
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dollars
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 took the first and the second
positions
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, million, thousand, dollars, positions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual income
  • Household
  • Income bracket
  • Trend
  • Significant
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Distribution
  • Shift
  • Proportion
  • Rise
  • Drop
  • Plateau
  • Peak
  • Fluctuation
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