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In some countries students are required to learn a foreign language but in other countries it is not necessary to do so. Discuss the benefits of each case and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, people are required to learn the non-native accent,
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however
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 in other
regions
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regions,
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 they do not have to
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. I believe that learning a
second
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dialect
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 can be beneficial, but
student
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students
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 have to learn their
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expression
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 to possess it as a citizen. To start with, one of the major
benefit
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benefits
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 is that learning a native
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 rather than a foreign
can
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one can
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 be the best fundamental for handling the next
language
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.
For example
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, there are countries with the highest level of a
second
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expression
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,
due to
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 the fact that pupils know their native
language
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, which leads to excellent understanding. It is really
usefull
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useful
 to know the non-native accent,
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however
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student
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students
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 should not forget
about
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to pay attention to
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their mother
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dialect
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.
On the other hand
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, there are several negative impacts that must
to
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be considered. One of the biggest
drawback
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 is the fact, that when young
adult
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adults
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 start learning
foreigh
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foreign
accent
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accents
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 only at 15-17, the
possibilities
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possibility
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 of pursuing undergraduate education abroad.
For instance
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, a student who used to study a
second
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 vocabulary and native at the same time could have fewer challenges than those who study a foreign
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 later on.
While
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 having a native
language
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 may better preserve cultural and national identity, learning a foreign one can create challenges later in life. In conclusion, it is impossible to learn foreign
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expression
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expressions
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 without any base in
mother
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the mother
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dialect
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. I suggest that having a good
abillity
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ability
 to speak in
native
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a native
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language
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 could help with learning any new
expression
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. I propose that children prioritize learning their native
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initially
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 and take up a
second
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afterward
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