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Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this develoment outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays it is a general trend among youngsters to leave their families in order to get
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 education or to find a better job
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 the urban areas. According there could be many different causes behind
this
 . I think that the benefits of
this
 development will
underweigh
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outweigh
 the losses
occuring
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occurring
 from
this
. I will discuss my point of view in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, one reason could be better work opportunities available in the big cities as compared to the small villages. The handsome salary package provided by
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employers in developed cities
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 the young generation
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thereby leaving their homes and parents. Probing
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 another cause could be better or quality education being offered in the urban areas. The quality of education is really high in the cities as compared to the small towns and villages.
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 it will help to fetch a good and prosperous job .
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, I think the advantages of
this
 development are more than the disadvantages and is
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therefore
 worth
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 so.
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