In some countries students are required to learn a foreign language but in other countries it is not necessary to do so. Discuss the benefits of each case and give your opinion.

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Many countries believe that students are not required to learn
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language
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because other subjects
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paramount to increase one's educational levels, but I think learning
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language
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English or French, has a significant impact on pupils' future by increasing their chances to get a job. The prime
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advantage
of learning
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foreign
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is an increase in one's job
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. Many renowned
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companies
today require linguestic people because these
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employees
could improve
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revenue. By recruiting bilingual or trilingual workers,
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organizations
can
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communicate
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, NASA often
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jobs
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offers for
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individuals
who speak two or more languages to
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communicate
with other companies from different countries.
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, students should learn
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foreign
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to guarantee their futures.
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not only
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job
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opportunities
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but
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plays
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role in enhancing one's
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cognitive
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liguestic
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linguistic
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individuals have more creativity than other people.
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, other countries believe that
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should concentrate
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other paramount subjects in order to
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raise
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student's educational
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levels
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. By focusing on science and maths, students may get
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good knowledge which gives them a chance to study at higher college
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mathematics
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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