People are surrounded by many kinds of advertising which can influence their life. Do the positive effects of this trend outweigh negative effects?

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world
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is
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by advertising,
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booming growth
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it
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is a result of
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explosion, businesses can use social
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platforms or
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channels to promote their products, services or messages effectively.
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,
this
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trend can have
positive
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and negative impact on our life. To be fair, advertising brings lots of positive influences to
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society, it manages to deliver the information of updating items to potential customers, so people are in
a
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easier situation now to choose their
favorite
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goods than
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past.
Moreover
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,
advertisement
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reflects a changing
world
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,
therefore
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, surrounding by many kinds of commercials means we are able to update news, modern technological
advancement
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or even political events in a fast-growing
world
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.
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,
advertisement
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possibly fails to offer beneficial effects to humanity in the long term because we merely have a small proportion of demands to purchase products, which
being
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introduced on television or social
media
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, if people are overwhelmed by advertising
contents
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, it will significantly waste
us
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time,
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instead
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we should utilize our precious time watch television shows or read books to have more knowledgeable benefits.
In addition
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, various kinds of
advertisement
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don’t secure the quality. Many commercials contain toxic
contents
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content
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and misinformation occasionally. These negative
effect
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effects
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can lead to serious consequences
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people’s awareness, especially
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children. As a matter of fact,
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advertisement
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advertisements
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still play an important role in the modern
world
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.
This
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trend has a promising potential to bring more advantages rather than advantages to humanity as the future process of
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economy needs to spread information or knowledge and advertising programs can provide efficient
transmition
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transmission
for it. Living in an era of mass
media
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helps us to have more chances and benefits.
Nevertheless
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,
advertising
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the advertising
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explosion can cause some terrible influences we never expected or projected.
Consequently
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, we should take action to make sure that the positive side of it still outweighs the negative side.
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