Food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumers. Some people believe we should buy food from the local farmers to protect environment and support local businesses. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the past few decades, there has been a noticeable increase in supporting local
food
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. Some individuals
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that purchasing local production
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businesses in their area and
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pollution from travelling goods. In my opinion, I think the benefits of
this
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including
sustainable
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a sustainable

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environment and enhancing local store profits outweigh
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the drawback

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drawback
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drawbacks

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which
is
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some
low quality
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products from differences
of
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weather
condition
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. On the one hand, the clearest disadvantage of supporting local
food
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is the quality of
food
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, particularly fruits
such
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strawberry
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strawberries

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, watermelon and
blueberry
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blueberries

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. Some fruits require a specific condition
such
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as
,
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wet soil or high temperature, leading to easily
have
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a
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unexpected taste and small size. A great example is durians which
they
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can not be planted in winter countries like China, England, United
State
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.
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, the primary profit of buying native foods is boosting local business economics. Buying local products
allow
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small stores
in
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near the area
has
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more income which
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to
make
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more native
residents
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profits. Another advantage of
this
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is reducing the amount of carbon dioxide emission from
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the traveling
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traveling
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process. Carbon dioxide,
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during vehicle travelling, is a gas that creates the greenhouse effect, the root cause of
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change problem.
Therefore
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, promoting local
food
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will
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environment
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disasters
such
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flood
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that
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from
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ice melting.
To sum up
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,
although
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there
is
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a
disadvantage
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disadvantages

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of
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buying local
food
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such
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as
low quality
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food
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, I think that there are more benefits than
its
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drawback
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drawbacks

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which are
support
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supporting

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the local stores and
protect
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protecting

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environment
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