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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.
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The pie chart illustrates household spending in a country in six categories namely ;housing ,
food
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 ,health care, education ,transportation and others from 1950 to 2010.The items are measured in percentage .
Overall
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 ,
it is clear that
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 the proportion of
food
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 expenditures,other
as well as
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 transportation increased dramatically ,
however
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, the indicator for housing sharply decreased between 1950 and 2010.
By contrast
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,it is interesting to note that in other spending there were minimal changes over a period of shown . Looking at the pie chart in more detail ,the ratio for
food
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 was 11,2% in 1950 and
this
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 figure increased enormously to 34% in 2010.
Moreover
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 , there was a significant decrease in the
food
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 category from 72,1% in 1950 to 22 % in 2010 ,respectively.
Furthermore
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 ,the percentage of transportation was 3,3% in 1950 ,
this
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 figure increased sharply to 14% in 2010.
In contrast
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 , the percentage of health care ,education and others changed minimally over a period of 6 decades .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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