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More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a morden life style which can not be treated with morden medicines. Some people think that a return to a traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extend to you agree?

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These days,
alot
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a lot
 of individuals have health problems and they take
modren
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modern
medicines
 , but
thay
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they
 can not
useful
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 in
it
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them
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.
Whereas
, some
people
 say that
a
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traditional medicine should be benefit and useful them more than a
modren
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modern
medicines
. I strongly agree with
this
 point , so in
this
 essay, I am
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going
 to discuss both
medicines
 a
modren
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modern
 and a traditional. On the one hand, with
improvement
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mderen
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modern
medicines
 , and
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increase
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 number of doctors and hospitals, all
people
 now take
a
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modren
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modern
treatment
, and they can go
any where
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anywhere
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 to get
treatment
 with
a
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strong
medicines
.
Also
, all countries, provide all
servieses
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services
 for
people
 who need
the
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treatment
,
sometime
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sometimes
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 they spend
alot
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a lot
 of money to buy any
mdecine
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medicine
medicines
 that they need, but they can't get
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the benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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.
However
, there are some
people
travel
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who travel
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 to
anther
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another
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 country to get
a
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modren
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modern
 medicine,
for instance
, India and Iran , some of them
they
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feel better
,
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 because they find
a
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good
treatment
. On
ther
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the
 other hand, others say that
a
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traditional
medicines
has
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 an interesting now.
May be
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that is
a
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better for them, but it
not
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does not
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 always treat them,
due to
 nowdays
people
 depend on
a
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modren
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modern
medicines
 more than
a
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traditional treatments, they think that it will help them to
be
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have
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 a better
long
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longer
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 life.
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,
a
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traditional
medicines
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 is very useful, because it
so
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is so
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 healthy and natural.
Moreover
, when they get
a
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traditional
medicines
, they can make their
medicines
 by themselves, they have knowledge about it making. In
additional
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, they used plants and all things that
related
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are related
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of
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 nature to make
medicines
, that it is a
healther
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healthier
 than
a
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modren
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modern
medicines
,
as well as
, they get more
benfits
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benefits
 and they treat quickly.
To conclude
, I completely believe both
of
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a
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modren
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modern
 and
a
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traditional
medicines
have
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are
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an
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interesting for all ages
of
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people
, they can use any medicine they feel
them
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is
a
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good for their health.
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