Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
competition
between
people
usual thing in different
sphere
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spheres
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of
life
. Mostly it is related to changes
of
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people
's
life style
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lifestyle
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and desire
of
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reach to success. Some
people
think that
competition
at work, at school and
daily
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in daily
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life
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life,
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is good,
while
others think that
people
should cooperate more. In
this
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I will discuss
at
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two different points of view and give my opinion.
Competition
has benefits in different
sphere
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spheres
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of
life
people
.
Firstly
,
competition
allow
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allows
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to
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us to
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solve
problem
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problems
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in little time.Because every
people
will try to win the
competition
and they try their best.
Consequently
in
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it
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lead
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leads
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to effective work of staff and more profit for
company
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the company
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.
Secondly
,
competition
at school can help to enhance
students
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students'
student's
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critical thinking and skill
of
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makeing
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making
decision
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decisions
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.Because they try to solve
problem
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problems
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firstly
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first
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, so they they must
to
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apply
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find
easier
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an easier
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and faster way of solving
prolem
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problems
problem
. Despite of benefits of
competition
, some
people
prefer
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to coorperate
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coorperate
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corporate
cooperate
.Because sometimes
competition
become
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becomes
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reason
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a reason
the reason
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for
argue
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arguing
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of
people
or team.
This
is
disrtust
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distrust
the relationship between
people
.
Moreover
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coorperation
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cooperation
can be
source
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a source
the source
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of creative
decision
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decisions
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.When
people
coorperate
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cooperate
to solve one problem,they can offer different interesting ideas and it can be effective in solving some problems.
Secondly
,at school
coorperation
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cooperation
corporation
help
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helps
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to improve
communication
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the communication
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skill
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skills
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of students,
due to
students will communicate
each
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with each
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other during they work in one team. In conclusion,
Competition
can enhance the
effectivity
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of
people
and
company
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a company
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,
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apply
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but have
chance
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a chance
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to create
arguement
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arguments
.I opine that
people
should be competitive.
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