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The lines graphs shows the percentage of households with electrical appliences in 1920 to 2019 and the number of houseworke per week. Summarize na dmake comparison where relavent.

The lines graphs shows the percentage of households with electrical appliences in 1920 to 2019 and the number of houseworke per week. Summarize na dmake comparison where relavent.
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The given two lines charts illustrate the percentage of
households
 with electrical items, and the number of housework per week from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the
usage
 of electrical products experienced an upward trend
while
 the number of
hours
 of housework experienced a decline. In 1920, around 40% of
households
 used washing
machine
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machines
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while
 approximately 30% and 1% of
households
 used
vaccuum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 respectively. In 1940, all electronic
appliences
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appliances
appliance
usage
 increased and approximately 60% of houses used washing
machine
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machines
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 and the
usage
 of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 sharply increased to around 55%.
Similarly
, the
usage
 of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 rose to approximately 50%.
While
 in 1980, around 100%
households
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of households
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 started using
regrigarator
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refrigerator
, the 100%
usage
 of
vaccuum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 started in 2000. The
usage
 of washing
machine
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machines
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 was significantly lower than two other
appliences
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appliances
, and in 2019, only 75% of
households
 used washing
machine
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machines
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. Meanwhile, from 1920 to 1980, the number of household work experienced a sharp decline from around 50
hours
 to roughly 20
hours
.
Then
, it again declined steadily and reached around 10
hours
 per week in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, usage, hours, machine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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