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Do you think it is better for students to work before their university studies? Why? Use reason and specific examples to support your choice .

#students #work #university #studies #reason #support #choice
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Work
 and
studies
 are
the
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 pivotal part of everyone's life. The idea of
students
 working before beginning their university
studies
 is often debated. In my opinion, it is beneficial in many ways for
students
 to do pre-university employment . There are plenty of benefits and perhaps the most obvious one is
students
 will learn practical life skills.
For instance
, working in
food
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 court can teach them to make decisions quickly and efficiently, as it is
fast-paced
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 place to
work
at
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apply
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. Adding to that, another advantage can be financial.
Students
 can save for their tuition
fee
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fees
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 and reduce the need for loans.
For example
, If they
work
 for one year and
saves
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 up enough money for their first year
study
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, it will ease their financial burden.
However
, every coin has two sides, despite all the benefits of working before university
studies
begins
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, there are some drawbacks. It is very important for
students
 to stay
focus
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 on their path.
Work
 should not detract from their academic preparation. In conclusion,
while
 there are potential downsides, the advantages of gaining
work
 experience before university outweigh them . The
work
 experience can teach them valuable
lesson
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lessons
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 for their upcoming future
studies
 and
career
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careers
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.
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