Many say that social medias badly effect to the youths What are the causes of this suggest some solutions Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

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There is no denying that social
media
has impacted negatively the younger generation, in
this
essay we will discuss why is
this
happening and how can we change
this
outcome.
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internet brought people from various backgrounds together, and what once used to be a way to communicate became a weaponized
mean
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to harass or stalk someone. To explain myself more, we can read daily
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in journals of young girls who got catfished online by ill-intended predators. Despite the constant warnings, more and more kids share their personal data online and omit that it is far from being a safe place. The lack of surveillance, monitoring and hazy laws
in particular
make
internet
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the perfect place to reach kids. We can
also
put the blame on absent or naive parents, who
instead
of taking a sit with the young generation and
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to them the limits and dangers of social
media
, choose to stay out of it. As a
physian
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physician
,
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have witnessed
first hand
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some shocking cases; one of them
in particular
still haunts me and
i
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chose her as an example. The teenager was posting her pictures on social
media
and
precising
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precision
where she
is
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and with
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;
therefore
making it extremely easy for a
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to find her, abduct her and do unspeakable things to her.
This
horrific story made me
personnaly
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personally
become a ghost on social
media
without any
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. I believe the best way to deal with
this
issue, for the time being, is to keep our lives private and not over-share, as we all know the best
medecine
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medicine
is prevention.
Ideally
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would like to think that privacy laws will be more severe, and social
media
will be
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forbidden
to younger users under a certain age.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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