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IELTS Essay Urban and Rural Population Trends The bar chart illustrates population trends globally by percentage from 1950 to 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Essay Urban and Rural Population Trends The bar chart illustrates population trends globally by percentage from 1950 to 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given linear graph depicts the urban, rural and total population
trends
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 in a period from 1950 to 2040
years
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 and the
trends
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 in age
dynamic
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 during
this
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 span of time. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent, that there
is
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are
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 no prognoses for crucial changes
of
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in
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 provincial areas,
while
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 citizens in downtown are estimated
gradually
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to gradually
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 rise.
Trends
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 in age structure for the group between 15 -65
years
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 are predicted
dramatically
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to dramatically
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 increase,
while
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 youngsters under 15 and old persons over 65 will be relatively stable.
To begin
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 with, the population in the cities started to expand from
near
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nearly
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 5% in 1950 and still
expands
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expanding
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 with prospects to reach approximately 40% in 2040, the same trend is prognosed
to
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for
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total
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the total
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 population, just over 10% in 1950 the percentage of citizens will expand by 35% in 2040. For rural areas there
is
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 no significant changes and indexes will be just over 5%.
Trends
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 in age Structure for the group of people between 15 to 65
years
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,
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 are going drastically rise from just over 5% in 1950 to 35% in 2040. Meanwhile young people under 15 and senior citizens over 65
years
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expected
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are expected
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 to stay
on
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in
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 position
5
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at 5
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%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trends, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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