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Some people think only best students should be rewarded. Others think we should reward students who make progress. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #students #reward #progress
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Every educational institution has
their
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 own outstanding
students
 which are measured by different aspects. Not all of them become the top among others since the beginning, but there are
also
 some
students
 who work harder to fill the knowledge and skill gap between them and their peers.
This
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students
 deserve an appreciation from two points of view. Going through the track record of best
students
, they usually specialize in certain
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fields
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. It doesn't take only one night to master a skill,
nevertheless
, it
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 years to explore it. Despite the possibility of being gifted, they may have been struggling with trials and errors and learning from their failure. Some of them already started working on their
specialty
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 since they were
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a
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young age,
making
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 them
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a better opportunity to become the best among the others. Being the best student
also
 indicates
the
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resistency
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resistance
 in themselves, as it is more challenging to keep on track than to start it.
While
 some
students
 have been excellent since the beginning, some others start making
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progress with a different timeline and pace. It is normal for people to discover their potential later than their peers. Despite the difficulty
to measure
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a
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progress, it can be quantified by their score improvement in
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the exam
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exam
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exams
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 and
qualified
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 by their achievement in a competition or career matters. Taking
a
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a further step
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further
 steps is not easy when a student doesn't have a willingness to grow and
feel
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 pessimistic.
Therefore
, those who want to improve their skill must have
a
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high motivation. In my opinion, becoming the best and making
a
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progress is not mutually exclusive. It may be easier and
feasible
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more feasible
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 to pick the best student for a reward by seeing their final result of learning.
However
, those who create improvements every passing time will have a higher chance
to become
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 the best in the future. The most important thing is to be consistent with the main goal and
to
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not give up in the middle of the journey.
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