The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the three
groups
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ages of
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the population
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population
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populations
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in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and the forecast for 2050.
Overall
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, it is predicted that the
population
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of Yemen, that
initially
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most populated by children, will shift to be dominated by society aged 15-59
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old in 2050.
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in Italy, it is projected that it will remain most populated by a group of
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aged 15 to 59
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old. It can be seen that in 2000, children and youngsters aged 0-14
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old were dominating Yemen's
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by 50.1%,
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, the number is predicted to significantly decrease to only 37%.
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,
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in the age group between 15-59
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old
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positioned as the second highest in the past, acquired 46.3% of the shares, forecasted to increase dramatically to 57.3% by 2050. Meanwhile, the older generation aged 60+
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old is expected to stay as the smallest proportion among the others, growing by only around 2% by 2050.
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, the largest proportion of the
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in Italy is predicted to remain unchanged, which is dominated by
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aged 15 to 59
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old,
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it will significantly drop from 61.6% to 46.2%.
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, elders who shared 24.1% of the total
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in 2000, are expected to rise drastically to 42.3%, nearly catching up with the younger generation.
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, the number of babies and juveniles aged 0-14 is projected to decrease slightly from 14.3% to 11.5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, years, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • population skewed
  • younger age groups
  • significant proportion
  • older population
  • projected
  • demographics
  • societal and economic challenges
  • youthful population
  • growing workforce
  • economic growth
  • aging population
  • demand for healthcare
  • pension systems
  • invest in education
  • job creation
  • demographic dividend
  • social policies
  • sustainable
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