The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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chart
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its
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shows the estimated world
illiteracy
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rate
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by
the
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region and by gender for the
last
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year.
while
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it is a commonly held belief that
female
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females

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have the lowest
rate
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of
illiteracy
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. In my
opinion
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opinion,

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it's quite the opposite, I consider that
female
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females

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have the highest rates of
illiteracy
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compared to
male
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males

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.
To begin
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with
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with,

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the
chart
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shows different rates in every region. In South Asia
female
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females

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have the highest
rate
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of
illiteracy
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in all
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chart
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charts

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reaching up to 60%,
while
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male
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males

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have much lower
illiteracy
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reaching more than 30%. In Arab
states
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states,

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the second highest
rate
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female
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of female

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illiteracy
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reaches up to 50%, at the same time male
illiteracy
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reach
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is

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lower than
the
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that

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female
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of female

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with almost 30%. In sub-Saharan Africa the third highest
rate
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in
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of

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illiteracy
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for
female
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females

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with the
rate
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going up to 50% whilst
male
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the male

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rate
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reach
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reaches

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to
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apply

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30%. It's noticeable that the
rate
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decreases when it comes to Latin American/ Caribbean and developed countries with the
rate
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precent
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per cent
present

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between
male
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males

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and female
is
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apply

The verb is appears to be unnecessary here.

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noticeably close.
To sum up
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, some people may have different opinions regarding the
chart
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, but I believe that
illiteracy
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is a huge issue and
need
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needs

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immediate attention.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, illiteracy, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 3 times.
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