The world of work is changing rapidly working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the cause and solution.

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In the past few decades, there has been a noticeable in retirement
plan
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in
middle
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the middle
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age group. Working conditions
are
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have
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quickly changed
in
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the
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apply
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worldwide. Individuals decide to change their position or company frequently because of a higher income.
Increase
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annual
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the annual
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salary
will solve
this
problem. The significant cause of
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in
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employees is that the other
companies
, especially cooperate
companies
, offer them a higher
salary
.
This
typically occurs in some specific jobs
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that required
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required
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advanced technical
skill
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skills
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,
such
as programmers, data scientists, and engineers, which
be
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lack of them in
working
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the working
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market
result
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in high income.
This
will make
companies
recruit new
worker
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workers
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in
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every year.
The
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clear example of
this
is
programmer
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programmers
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in Thailand who change
companies
in
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every year
due to
the fact that they are
demanded
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in demand
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in many firms. One most effective solution to address the problem is that
companies
should not only
increase
yearly
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the yearly
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income
in
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for
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every
employees
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employee
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, who
have
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excellent performance
,
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but
also
add more benefits to support their life, including life
insurances
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insurance
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, fitness memberships and flexible work hours.
This
policy will attract more workers to renew
the
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their
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work contract. Google is a good example of
this
policy, they
clamed
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claimed
that they provide the highest
salary
and sufficient benefits to their employee, which
significant
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reduce
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resign rates.
To sum up
, people always change their
job
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jobs
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because they want a higher
salary
and have more options to choose
.
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from.
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Companies
should
increase
personal benefits
such
as
,
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gym memberships, and
a
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an
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annual
salary
increase
to solve
this
problem.
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