The world of work is changing rapidly working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the cause and solution.
In the past few decades, there has been a noticeable in retirement
plan
in Fix the agreement mistake
plans
middle
age group. Working conditions Correct article usage
the middle
are
quickly changed Verb problem
have
in
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apply
the
worldwide. Individuals decide to change their position or company frequently because of a higher income. Correct article usage
apply
Increase
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Increasing
annual
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the annual
salary
will solve this
problem.
The significant cause of reposition
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repositioning
in
employees is that the other Change preposition
apply
companies
, especially cooperate companies
, offer them a higher salary
. This
typically occurs in some specific jobs Correct pronoun usage
that required
required
advanced technical Wrong verb form
require
skill
, Fix the agreement mistake
skills
such
as programmers, data scientists, and engineers, which be
lack of them in Unnecessary verb
apply
working
market Add an article
the working
result
in high income. Correct subject-verb agreement
results
This
will make companies
recruit new worker
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workers
in
every year. Change preposition
apply
The
clear example of Correct article usage
A
this
is programmer
in Thailand who change Fix the agreement mistake
programmers
companies
in
every year Change preposition
apply
due to
the fact that they are demanded
in many firms.
One most effective solution to address the problem is that Change preposition
in demand
companies
should not only increase
yearly
income Correct article usage
the yearly
in
every Change preposition
for
employees
, who Change to a singular noun
employee
have
excellent performanceCorrect subject-verb agreement
has
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
add more benefits to support their life, including life insurances
, fitness memberships and flexible work hours. Fix the agreement mistake
insurance
This
policy will attract more workers to renew the
work contract. Google is a good example of Change the word
their
this
policy, they clamed
that they provide the highest Correct your spelling
claimed
salary
and sufficient benefits to their employee, which significant
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significantly
reduce
resign rates.
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reduces
To sum up
, people always change their job
because they want a higher Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
salary
and have more options to choose.
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from.
Companies
should increase
personal benefits such
as,
gym memberships, and Remove the comma
apply
a
annual Change the article
an
salary
increase
to solve this
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite