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Do you think consumers should avoid over packaged products or it is the responsibility of the producer to avoid extra packaging of products?” Give your views or any relevant example with your own experience.

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Some people believe that
consumers
 should avoid over-packed
products
,
while
 others believe that it is the responsibility of the
producers
 to reduce
over-packaging
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the over-packaging
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 of
products
. I personally believe that
while
producers
 can only
control
 the over-packaging of
products
,
consumers
 can mostly
control
 the packaging of
products
 because if they do not purchase over-packaged
products
,
producers
 will not be encouraged to manufacture over-packaged
products
.
Producers
 are solely responsible for the packaging of
products
 because they produce, package and distribute consumer goods among
consumers
.
While
 packaging, it is the responsibility of the
producers
 to become conscious
about
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of
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 environmental pollution and the harmful
effect
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effects
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 of overpackaging on the
environment
.
For example
, these days, many manufacturers from Japan are
environment
 conscious, and
therefore
, they believe in almost zero packaging of all materials and food.
However
, I personally believe that the public can encourage the
producers
 to reduce packaging because they will ultimately purchase
products
.
Consumers
 can
control
 packaging because ultimately they will buy
products
, and the profit depends on their purchase. If
consumers
 become protective of the
environment
, they will avoid purchasing over-packaged
products
.
As a result
,
producers
 will encounter loss in their businesses, which will encourage them not to add accessive packaging to
products
.
For instance
, in India, people are very
environment
 conscious, and they do not want to buy over-packaged fruits and other consumer goods, and manufacturers,
therefore
, do not produce over-packaged
products
.
Therefore
, I think that only
consumers
 can effectively
control
 over-packaging. In conclusion, I personally believe that
while
producers
 have the responsibility to
control
 packaging,
consumers
 can
control
 it more effectively because they can stop buying if
products
 are over-packaged.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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