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Food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumers. Some people believe we should buy food from local farmers to protect the environment and help the local business. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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As our life expectancy prolonged and new jobs came up to the surface
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 the 4th industrial revolution, employees now don't contract with companies on long-term. Now we are going to find out in
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 essay about the pros and cons of
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 type of employment.
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we are going to focus on the pros. Having a short-term experience in a company gives you various
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 in many fields.
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 will make you a more challenging type of person and give you more adaptability to society and the company.
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, you can grow your leadership by meeting a lot of people, and having conflict and harmony which can improve your work efficiency. The next topic are cons of short periods of contracts. As I said, short-term
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 are equal to various
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, but you can't have relationships or
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 in depth. Even if you worked in a lot of companies, a shallow understanding of your job will make your knowledge useless.
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, if you are an introverted person,
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 kind of employment will interrupt your adaptation to your work.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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