The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Wite the essay in 150 words.

The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Wite the essay in 150 words.
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The map provides information about the changes in StockFord city in 1930 and 2010.
Overall
, StockFord developed with more
houses
and
agricultural
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area
was
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decreased significantly It was clearly seen from the map,
there
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that there
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were several things which had not changed
such
as
bridge
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the bridge
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, post office, river Stoke, primary school and some
houses
. The shops next to
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the post
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post
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the post
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office were removed in 2010, there was
only
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an only
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a post
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post
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office in the area nearby. There were several roads extended because more and more
houses
were constructed. Farmland
besides
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River Stoke in
South
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the South
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of
map
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was wiped out in order to have more space for building
houses
in 2010, The retirement home
replaced
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for
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large
house
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houses
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and
garders
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garters
gardens
garden
. There was only a primary school in 1930,
however
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there were 2
houses
built next to
primary
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the primary
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school. One tree in the corner was cut to have more
spaces
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space
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for
houses
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • development
  • expansion
  • urbanization
  • replacement
  • redevelopment
  • renovation
  • gentrification
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