Write about the following topic. An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development?

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While
we are facing a huge development in
surgeries
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surgery
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methods, there are some
people
who prefer taking cosmetic
surgeries
in aim to change their
looking
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look
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. In my opinion,
this
type of
operations
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has more negative effects on normal
people
who do not need it. and it has some
postive
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positive
effects on
people
who their
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whose
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appearance is already damaged. On the one hand, normal
people
may
face
addiction as a
consequnce
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consequence
of taking these
surgeries
. Taking cosmetic
operations
will create some
extra-beauty
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to
modren
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modern
people
.
As a result
, they will like their new
looking
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look
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and they will be
obssesed
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obsessed
in
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with
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their beauty.
Consequently
, they will be so much addicted
in
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enhancing their own looking. Correspondingly, they will spend much more money in
hope
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the hope
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to be
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of being
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more beautiful. Taking those many additional
surgeries
may impact the
face
bone
structure negatively by damaging the
bone
as a consequence
of moving the
face
skeleton more than once.
On the other hand
. Abnormal
people
who have incorrect
bone
posture in their own
face
or body will
be
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so much
benefited
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from cosmetic
operations
. They really need to correct these wrong
bone
postures to be the same as ordinary
people
.
As a result
, they will be so much happier and will have an easier life by limiting the depression that the
abnormal looking
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cause it. governments always provide
this
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this person
these people
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people
the
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money that they need to do these
surgeries
in aim to enhance their life and appearance.
To conclude
, cosmetic
operations
will be extremely useful to normal
people
meanwhile it derives
neagtive
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negative
effects on normal
people
who
dont
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don't
need it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cosmetic surgery
  • Appearance
  • Improvement
  • Societal pressure
  • Media influence
  • Self-confidence
  • Self-esteem
  • Physical imperfections
  • Defects
  • Career
  • Professional reasons
  • Advancements
  • Medical technology
  • Accessibility
  • Negative
  • Psychological impacts
  • Realistic expectations
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