Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Nowadays, Some
people
believe that local authority has investing
more Change the verb form
to invest
money
in Arts
such
as
Music
and theatre
. while
others argued that authority
must invest more Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
money
in public services
instead
. I am partially agree
with the given statement because of Change the verb form
partially agree
government
should more money
in
public Change preposition
on
services
it
has been Correct pronoun usage
which
great
impact on destitute Add an article
a great
people
. Along with
government
Correct article usage
the government
invest
Wrong verb form
investing
money
in Arts
. It is more Convent for Correct article usage
the Arts
people
who work in
Full-day. Change preposition
apply
As well as
people
who interested
in Add a missing verb
are interested
Music
and theatre
.
On the one band
, there are multifarious Correct your spelling
hand
reason
why Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
government
must Correct article usage
the government
investment
in public Replace the word
invest
services
. To commence with, First
prominent Add an article
the First
reason
is, In today's time, most of
the insignificant Change preposition
apply
town
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towns
who
do not Correct pronoun usage
apply
fulfill
their fundamental amenities. Change the spelling
fulfil
As well as
they have not know
about
electricties Change the verb form
known
along with
public transport.Fourthmore
, They have not Correct your spelling
Furthermore
know
about telecommunications. For illustration, The village Change the verb form
known
kuttygrama
located in the Indian Change the capitalization
Kuttygrama
stale
of JharkhandCorrect your spelling
state
,
has no electricity. It is a little village. Remove the comma
apply
Hense
, Correct your spelling
Hence
government
should Add an article
the government
must
invest more Remove a modal verb
apply
money
in public services
.
On the other hand
, there are a number a
Correct your spelling
of
reason
why Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
government
has Add an article
the government
investing
more Change the verb form
invested
money
in Arts
, Such
as Music
and theatre
. First
and foremost Add an article
The first
reason
is Music
and theatre
has
Change the verb form
have
giving
Wrong verb form
given
relaxion
Correct your spelling
relaxation
on
Change preposition
to
people
who Work in commercial
field. Add an article
the commercial
As well
as
Change preposition
apply
Arts
is more essential part for
Change preposition
of
humans
life.Change the noun form
human
while
,
Remove the comma
apply
people
Unnecessary verb
apply
have
feel Add the particle
have to
boring
that's time Replace the word
bored
music
is crucial
part Add an article
a crucial
in
their life.To give a clear example, Change preposition
of
people
who work in commercial
field Add an article
the commercial
who
need to mind Correct pronoun usage
apply
relaxion
, In Correct your spelling
relaxation
this
situation Music
and theatre
is
best for them.
In conclusion, Correct subject-verb agreement
are
although
investment in Arts
, Such
as movie
and Fix the agreement mistake
movies
theatre
is the best.Owing to people
help Change noun form
people's
of
Change preposition
with
the
Correct article usage
apply
music
and theatre
they feel better. In my opinion, while
local authority should more money
in
public Change preposition
into
services
is best
way to Change the article
the best
improvment
insignificant town. Correct your spelling
improvement
improve
Moreover
, best for destitute people
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