Some people believe that students should wear school uniforms. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some individuals think that
students
should wear Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
uniforms
. I completely agree with Use synonyms
this
opinion, because if they Linking Words
will
wear anything they want it can lead to Verb problem
apply
pay
attention only to their appearance, with no focus Change the verb form
paying
to
lessons .
First of all ,Change preposition
on
school
Use synonyms
uniforms
can be one of the Use synonyms
reason
to be Change to a plural noun
reasons
equally
despite your financial situation, and I will not feel superfluous about Change the word
equal
clothes
. So , it can help you to deal with inequality among your classmates. Use synonyms
For instance
, a lot of people in my area are not financially stable , so they can not buy different Linking Words
clothes
every week for their children . In Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
case
uniform is Add a comma
case,
best
solution to solve it .
Second , if Change the article
the best
school
Use synonyms
uniforms
Use synonyms
will
not be essential thing and if Verb problem
are
Use synonyms
school
Fix the agreement mistake
schools
will
not require them to wear Verb problem
do
uniform
, Fix the agreement mistake
uniforms
students
will pay attention more to their appearance and Use synonyms
clothes
. Use synonyms
For example
, some people do not have financial problems and they can afford to buy more expensive and more Linking Words
clothes
than Use synonyms
who
do not have enough money for Correct quantifier usage
others who
this
. So that it lasts against Linking Words
with
that some Change preposition
apply
students
may feel inequality and competitiveness . It can Use synonyms
also
lead to more Linking Words
argues
with their parents and in some situations even to suicide. Replace the word
arguments
Also
, Linking Words
students
Use synonyms
that
have enough money will only think about how they will look during lessons , Correct pronoun usage
who
about
their makeup and they will waste their time Correct word choice
and about
to choose
Change the verb form
choosing
clothes
and Use synonyms
for
makeup.
In summary, there are two main points and reasons Change preposition
apply
such
as Linking Words
,
financial problems and Remove the comma
apply
do
not Verb problem
apply
have focus
Verb problem
focusing
to
the lessons . Change preposition
on
Also
in Linking Words
this
Linking Words
essay
I wrote ,why I think Add a comma
essay,
students
should wear Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
uniforms
.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Try to clarify and expand upon your ideas to ensure clearer and more comprehensive ideas throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Use more connective words and phrases to improve the logical flow and coherence between your ideas.
task achievement
You provided specific examples to illustrate your points effectively, such as referring to financial issues and their impact on students.
coherence cohesion
You presented a clear introduction and a concise conclusion, framing your essay well.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite