These days, more and more parks and open spaces in cities are being turned into gardens where people can grow fruit and vegetables

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coherence cohesion
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Ensure the main points are fully developed and supported. Add more specific examples or details to strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
You have identified some relevant points about the benefits of parks and open spaces, such as improving city aesthetics and enhancing emotional well-being.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes both advantages and disadvantages of turning parks and open spaces into gardens, showing an attempt to balance your argument.

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