The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The map illustrates the floor plan of a public
library
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from 20
years
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ago and how it looks now.
Overall
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, there are a number of significant changes over the
years
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in all of the
room
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as well the layout of the
library
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. The most noticeable differences is that in 20
years
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ago, there are table & chairs in the middle of the
library
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,
whereas
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now it is being removed completely. In 20
years
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ago, adult
fiction
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and non-
fiction
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book is separated in different area,
while
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now only the adult
fiction
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books section
that is
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left
along with
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information desk and self-service machines the east side of the
library
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. The aim of four different
room
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has
also
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changes over the
years
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. The
room
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located in the southwest used to be for entertainment and games
room
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is replace for children’s
fiction
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book and for storytelling event
along with
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both two giant sofa. The
room
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that used for children's book now change into lecture
room
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. There are
also
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new
room
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for cafe which before it is used for enquiry desk, and computer
room
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that used as reading
room
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20
years
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ago.
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, the new section of all reference books is located between computer and children's
fiction
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books.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with, also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, years, room, fiction with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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