As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. To what extent do you agree with such a procedure?
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Task Response
Make sure your essay fully addresses all parts of the task. Clearly state your position on cloning for spare parts and discuss it with more detailed arguments and examples.
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Task Response
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