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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares underground railway systems in six cities in terms of their opening dates, the lengths of their routes (in
kilometers
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kilometres
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), and the number of
passengers
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 they serve annually (in millions).
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, Tokyo has the highest annual passenger numbers,
while
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 London has the longest route.
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, Kyoto and Los Angeles have both the shortest networks and the lowest passenger numbers. London’s underground
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, which opened in 1863, is the oldest and has a route length of 394
km
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, serving 775
million
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passengers
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 annually. Paris, which launched its
system
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 in 1900, has a much shorter network at 199
km
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 but accommodates significantly more
passengers
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 (1,191
million
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). Tokyo
,
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 opened in 1927, serves the highest number of
passengers
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 (1,928
million
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) with a 155
km
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 route. In the United States, Washington DC’s
system
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 (1976) is 126
km
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 long and serves 144
million
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passengers
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,
while
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 Los Angeles,
opened
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 in 2001, has a much smaller
system
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 of 28
km
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 with only 50
million
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passengers
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. Kyoto’s railway, launched in 1981, is the shortest at 11
km
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, carrying 45
million
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passengers
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 annually.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, system, km, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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