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pie chart and table for about people who are going to the dance clases

#people #dance #clases
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 pie chart and table illustrate the location of dance classes between four groups and
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 types of the classes that are available
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 their ages.
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, it is evident that most of the
people
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 who are participating in these classes are students from private schools that are double school halls and ballet is one of the most common choices among
people
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 under the age of 11 . Modern
dances
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 are famous among teenagers. Regarding the location , private schools by more than 48 per cent are doubled Schools halls are one of the places that pay attention a lot to the
dances
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 ,
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, community halls by 18 per cent come in third place
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Finally
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 college studios with lower than 10 per cent has achieved the
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 rank . For about ages , ballet with 600 students has got the first places among others for about
people
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 from under 11.
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 modern
dances
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 with approximately 500 students capture the attention of
people
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 between 11-16 . I have to mention that top
dances
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 are popular for both groups .
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Successfully identifies key trends and differences reported in the visual data.
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Addresses significant points related to the topic such as popularity of classes among different age groups.
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Provides a clear introduction that outlines the data's focus and a summarized conclusion that wraps up the findings.

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