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IELTS writing task 1 sample answer essay on the topic of Porth Harbour in 2000 and today.

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 illustrates how Porth Harbor has changed from 2000 until the current day.
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, it is evident that it has become more accessible by adding a new
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 and roads , On top of that many different facilities like shops and hotels have been added to make it even more convincing for visitors . In 2000, There was only a single
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 located in the northern part of the
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 below the public beach.
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 , These days a new
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 is opened alongside it . near the
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 marina was placed that connected to the main road with the help of a car park . Today ,
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 place is replaced by fishing boats in the southern part of the
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 . and exactly bedside of it a new café and shops have recently opened . In the southeast part of the
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, a new hotel is opened and replaced by the castle and
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 hotel has changed the pattern of the public beach into a private one . and in order to make it more accessible for people a new road recently opened in
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 area . All in all , all of these updates have changed the landscapes of
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 harbour.
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Work on the clarity of expression. Some sentences could be more concise and clearer.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of the changes to maintain clarity.
coherence cohesion
Review grammatical structures to avoid minor errors, such as capitalization and punctuation mistakes.
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The introduction summarizes the overall changes effectively.
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You identified and explained the key changes in Porth Harbor over time.
coherence cohesion
The essay follows a logical structure with distinct sections for different changes.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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