The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra, on a weekday on the weekend, in 2019
The average count of
visitors
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into
six leisure sites in Canberra, Change preposition
to
according to
the data, reveals the trends of Linking Words
people
spending their time Use synonyms
in
both a Change preposition
on
weekday
and the Use synonyms
weekend
. Use synonyms
Overall
, Linking Words
people
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tends
to visit Change the verb form
tend
the
sites Correct article usage
apply
such
as parks, shopping centres, cafes and restaurants, museums, movie theatres, and Linking Words
libraries
, mostly on the Use synonyms
weekend
rather than on a Use synonyms
weekday
.
Cafes and restaurants, Use synonyms
for example
, are the most attractive Linking Words
place
where visited Fix the agreement mistake
places
more
than 140 Change preposition
by more
people
on the Use synonyms
weekend
, followed by parks (100 Use synonyms
visitors
), shopping centres (90), movie theatres (80), museums (60), and Use synonyms
libraries
(nearly 40 Use synonyms
visitors
).
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In contrast
, when a Linking Words
weekday
comes, Use synonyms
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people
who visit the sites Correct article usage
the people
is
as not Correct subject-verb agreement
are
much
as Correct quantifier usage
many
the
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at the
weekend
. Use synonyms
While
the place providing food and Linking Words
bevearge
like Correct your spelling
beverage
beverages
cafe
and Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
restaurant
still lead the type of attraction with 90 Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
visitors
, Use synonyms
people
on the Use synonyms
weekday
prefer visiting Use synonyms
shoping
centres (60 Correct your spelling
shopping
visitors
) Use synonyms
instead
of going to parks (50 Linking Words
visitors
). The Use synonyms
extremly
shifting Correct your spelling
extreme
of
the average number, Change preposition
in
however
, belongs to museums which Linking Words
is
visited by less than 40 Change the verb form
are
people
on a Use synonyms
weekday
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whereas
it has more than 60 Linking Words
visitor
on the Change to a plural noun
visitors
weekend
. The same is experienced by movie Use synonyms
theaters
that have 40 Change the spelling
theatres
visitors
on a Use synonyms
weekday
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Linking Words
while
80 on the Correct word choice
and
weekend
. Use synonyms
Libraries
are likely more stable than others. Even though it Use synonyms
becomes
the site with the lowest Wrong verb form
has become
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visitors
, Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
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people
who Correct article usage
the people
comes
to Change the verb form
come
libraries
is around 20-40 Use synonyms
in
both a Change preposition
on
weekday
and the Use synonyms
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weekend
.
In conclusion, cafes and restaurants are the most attractive Fix the agreement mistake
weekends
place
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places
in
both a Change preposition
on
weekday
and the Use synonyms
weekend
, Use synonyms
while
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the
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apply
libraries
are vice versa.Use synonyms
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