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(Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

(Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows
population
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 increase, average
birth
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 of each woman, and life expectancy at
birth
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 in
countries
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 with three distinct income levels (high, middle, and low) in 2000 and 2004.
Overall
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, high-income
countries
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 have the lowest
population
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 growth and highest lifespan expectancy,
in contrast
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, low-income
countries
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 have the highest citizen growth and the shortest in terms of life expectancy. It can be seen that
countries
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 with high earnings experienced 0.8%
population
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 growth
initially
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 and 0.7% in 2004.
Moreover
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, the women
population
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 in
this
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 group only gives
birth
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 to an average of 1.7,
although
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, it has the longest lifespan at 78 to 78.7 years old.
Conversely
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, it is shown that there are 2% and 1% populace increase in
countries
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 with low salaries in the two given periods.
In addition
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,
this
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 category has the shortest term of existence at only 58.1 to 58.8 years old.
Additionally
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, it has the highest
birth
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 rate nearly reaching 4 on average. Moving to the medium-income nations,
this
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 section has a stable citizens increase
at
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of
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 0.9% each year.
Furthermore
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, the average
birth
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 rate is at 2.2 in 2002 and decreases slightly to 21 in 2004.
Finally
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, people in these
countries
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 usually live until the age of 69 to 70 from 2002 to 2004.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, birth, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Population growth rate
  • Average birth per woman
  • Life expectancy at birth
  • Income levels
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Correlations
  • Improvements
  • Declines
  • Statistics
  • Comparisons
  • High-income countries
  • Low-income countries
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