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Your company has recently introduced a new work uniform. You are mostly happy with the uniform, but there is one thing that you do not like. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter say what you like about the uniform explain what you don’t you like about the uniform suggest how the uniform can be improved

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Dear Sir Hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to express my feelings regarding the uniform that you have provided all employees. I like the colour of
attire
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 as it gives a professional look when we wore .
Also
, the other thing
a
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black colour bow
that is
 different from
previous
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the previous
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 custom. Let me explain one thing about
dress
that
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apply
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all workers
dissatisfied
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are dissatisfied
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 with the
fabrics
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fabric
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 of
dress
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the dress
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 which is thick and we feel uncomfortable because it becomes difficult to take a breath after wearing
this
. As per the conditions of work, the stuff of
dress
 would be suitable in only
winter
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the winter
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 seasons.
Additionally
, the design and style of
current
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dress
 are similar to the
last
 uniform. There are certain ways to improve the style and stuff of
dress
. The cotton cloth should be used to improve the quality of
uniform
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the uniform
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 which would give more happiness and satisfaction at work.
Moreover
, the Tailor could assist us
to sew
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in sewing
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a
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the
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 latest design of shirts. I hope you will consider
this
 inconvenience
of
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 all employees very soon. Yours Sincerely ABC
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next for enhanced coherence.
task achievement
Expand on the reasons for the dissatisfaction with the fabric to fully cover task requirements.
coherence and cohesion
Clear usage of greeting and closing remarks, making the letter formal and polite.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph covers a distinct aspect, such as positive aspects, negative aspects, and suggestions, maintaining clear structure.
task achievement
The tone is polite and professional throughout the letter, suitable for addressing a manager.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • introduced
  • appreciation
  • pleasing
  • professional image
  • elegant
  • sophistication
  • professionalism
  • high quality
  • appearance
  • comfort
  • modern
  • stylish
  • tailored
  • sleek lines
  • polished
  • discomfort
  • relaxed
  • adjustable
  • beneficial
  • aesthetics
  • commitment
  • valued
  • enhance
  • modifications
  • impression
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