The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015.
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illustrate
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the mobile subscription and fixed telephone lines in four different countries from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
, throughout the
years
, the
number
for
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mobile phone
subscription
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subscriptions
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show
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showed
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an upward trend except in Eritrea, whilst
for
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fixed
telephone
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telephones
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remained stable. The subscriptions for mobile
phone
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phones
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increase
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in three countries. The UK started highest with 100 people in 2005,
then
slightly rose to around 120 people and remained stable ever since.
Similarly
, the
number
for Uruguay and India
also
increase
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from less than 50
for
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then
gradually rose over the
years
until
reach
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reached
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its peak of over 150 in 2013 for Uruguay before slowly
fell
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falling
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to 150,
while
less than 100 for India in 2015.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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the
number
for Eritrea levelled off in 10 throughout the
years
.
On the other hand
,
for
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subscription
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subscriptions
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of
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to
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fixed telephone shows stabilised except
the
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UK. The
number
for the UK
tend
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tends
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to decline with a slight rise in 2009
thar
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which
resulted
over
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50 in 2015. Others
shows
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show
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a stable
number
over the
years
, with Uruguay
approximately
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at approximately
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30 and both India and Eritrea on the bottom line with less than 10 over the
years
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • subscriptions
  • mobile phone
  • fixed phone
  • increase
  • significant
  • rise
  • stable
  • pronounced
  • contrast
  • decline
  • steadily
  • highest
  • gradual
  • dramatic
  • usage
  • general
  • surpass
  • end of the period
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