The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra, on a weekday on the weekend, in 2019

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rate of guests who visited six different locations in

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in 2019.

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, The number of visitors that arrive on weekends is much higher compared to workdays in all attractions. On weekdays The bulk of visitors are located in cafes and

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with 80

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on these days. Shopping

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come close with 60 guests,

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comes parks and movie theatres at around 40 of them, and

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libraries and museums are the least visited with only 20. Weekends witness a huge surge of cafe and restaurant users going up to 140 of them, Followed by parks and shopping

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welcoming around 90 consumers. museums and movie theatres have allowed around 70 visits

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. Libraries are listed as the least visited

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almost 40 visits

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The bar chart below shows the average number of visitors who went to six types of attractions in Canberra, on a weekday on the weekend, in 2019

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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