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Band 5.5

Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
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 modern world, the
usage
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 of
plastic
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 products has increased to its highest limit.
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 products damage the ecosystem very intensely. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss how it damages the environment
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 the solutions to reduce the
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 of
plastic
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To begin
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 with, the production of
plastic
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 damages the environment very effectively. To elaborate , producing it is not an easy task it releases thousands of chemicals in the air in the form of poisonous gases.
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 , Delhi has the highest number of
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 factories in the world
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 the release of gases in the surroundings the air quality index over there is very poor many people face lung diseases and cancer symptoms
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 inhaling these gases in the environment.
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, dumping of
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 waste in the oceans is increasing day by day which affects the marine ecosystem in the ocean.
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 , there are several species in the ocean that are
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 alarming rate
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get
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 endangered
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 dumbing the
plastic
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 in the ocean. Every year billions of
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 bottles are dumped into the sea. As a solution, the Government should the strict action on using
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 they should fine the businesses that
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plastic
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 bags that should
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 with paper bags.
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, the taxes on
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 products should be increased so the small businesses that are using
plastic
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 can be reduced and that will promote the
use
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 of paper bags and reduce the
usage
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. Individuals should do campaigns on the
usage
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 of
plastic
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 by means of social networking, and posters to stop the
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, it is very important to stop the
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 of
plastic
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otherwise
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 it is going to affect the upcoming generations and the Earth will
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 live everywhere there will be dumping of
plastic
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 and it takes thousands of years to decompose.
Government
Fix the agreement mistake
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 and individuals should spread awareness to stop the
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 of
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coherence
Consider organizing your essay into clear paragraphs, with each one addressing a specific point or idea. This ensures a logical flow and makes it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
task achievement
You presented good arguments and provided examples, but try to elaborate on each example further to strengthen your task achievement score. For example, you could explain more about the consequences of marine species endangerment due to plastic waste.
task achievement
Try to maintain a consistent level of detail throughout your essay. Some parts are well-detailed, while others could use more explanation. Strive for even coverage across all points you make.
coherence
Your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, giving your response a nice structure.
task achievement
You adequately addressed the task by discussing both the problems plastic causes and solutions involving governments and individuals, which is a very good approach to the prompt.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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