You recently started commuting to work by bicycle and discovered that there is a problem with bicycle parking near the building where you work. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter, explain the reason for using a bicycle to commute mention what problems you have encountered with parking what you recommend to solve the problems Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope

this

letter finds you well. The purpose of writing

this

letter is to notify you about a locking issue of bicycles in its parking

that is

causing a major problem. I am working in Apple's

Canadain

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Canadian

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headquarter

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headquarters

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near your building and residing only 15 minutes away from my work.

Due to

that, I prefer to ride

bicycle

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a bicycle

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to work as not only it does not

emits

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emit

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any carbon into

atmosphere

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the atmosphere

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, but it is

also

the fastest way of

commute

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commuting

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to work.

Therefore

, I have been using your parking facility for almost six months now.

And recently

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Recently

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, I have noticed that many

parking's

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parking

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locking

dock

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docks

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Correct subject-verb agreement

are

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not working. As a

concequence

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consequence

, I have to lock my

bicycle

with

chain

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a chain

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and always have a fear of

bicycle

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my bicycle

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getting stolen. I would

stongly

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strongly

encourage you to replace all

demaged

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damaged

or broken parking docks with new docks, as

this

may help you

attaract

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attract

more riders. Being your customer I have always admired a text message notification that I get when I lock/unlock my

bicycle

, which

rightnow

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right now

is not working. Please take

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apply

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immediate action on

this

issue. Thank you in advance. Sincerely, Ruchin Patel

Submitted by ruchin27 on Sat Dec 21 2024

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task achievement

Consider adding more details about your positive experience with cycling or specific incidents related to the issue.

coherence cohesion

Pay attention to minor grammatical errors to improve clarity.

coherence cohesion

Your letter has a clear structure with a well-defined introduction, body, and conclusion.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is polite and suitable for a formal request.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

196 words

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