The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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about
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police
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the police
what
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While the
pie charts illustrate the percentages of how the money was spent in two years.
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it is clear that
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increase
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increased
comared
to 2017. Correct your spelling
compared
Buidings
and transport had Correct your spelling
Buildings
similiar
percentages Correct your spelling
similar
while
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spending
on technology was almost doubled.
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andother
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and other
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million
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in 2017. The total income in 2017 was less Use synonyms
that
compared to 2018. The national government provided 175.5 and 177.8 Correct word choice
than
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million
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national
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the national
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million
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sources
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slight
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a slight
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in 2018
police
budget reached Use synonyms
to
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euros
.
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technology
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over time, in 2018. Correct your spelling
doubled
double
In addition
, buildings and transport always stayed at 17 per cent during these years. Linking Words
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around
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by around
overtime
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, sources, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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