The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.
The diagram and pie chart illustrate the
chocolate
production process and five distinct factors to determine the price of a Use synonyms
chocolate
bar.
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Overall
, the whole process starts with crushing Linking Words
cocoa
beans and ends with the final products turned into Use synonyms
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bars or delivered to the food industry. Regarding the pie chart, it can be seen that the highest share of the price is given out to the cost of ingredients Use synonyms
while
the smallest one goes to the farmer.
In the beginning, Linking Words
cocoa
beans will undergo a grinding process in a shredder machine, resulting in Use synonyms
cocoa
liquor and waste. After that, it will be divided into two procedures, the first one is industrial Use synonyms
chocolate
manufacturing, in which sugar will be added before it Use synonyms
finally
produces ready-to-eat Linking Words
chocolate
bars. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, the Linking Words
cocoa
liquor will be pressed in the pressing engine to make Use synonyms
cocoa
butter and powder for the food industry.
Regarding the pie chart, the costs of ingredients and supermarkets receive roughly a third of the price of the total. Ranked in third place are taxes with 15%, Use synonyms
while
the revenue for the Linking Words
chocolate
company is just 10%. Use synonyms
Finally
, the farmer receives no more than 4%.Linking Words
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