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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015
#households #income
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The bar chart gives an idea about the numbers of the US families
according to
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 the money they gained per
one
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year
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. The study involved three periods 2007,2011 and 2015 By and large, obviously, the largest figure was shown by those who obtained more than 100,000$ every
year
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.
While
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. the lowest one was registered by those who gained between 75,000 and 99,999. In
term
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terms
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 of 2007,
it is clear that
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 almost 30
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millions
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million
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 US households were obtaining more than 100,000 $ in one
year
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.
Additionally
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, those who got less than 25,000 and between 25,000 and 49,999 were ratting 25
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millions
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million
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,and nearly 27
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millions
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million
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, respectively.
Furthermore
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,
Americans
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American
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 families who gained between 50,000 and 74,999 with those who earned between 75,000 and 99,999 were showing above 20
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millions
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million
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 and less than 15 in orders.These two groups were in fixed
figure
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figures
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 within all the years.
Moreover
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, in 2011
Americans
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American
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 families who acquired less than 25,000
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year
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years
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 rose to less than 30
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millions
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million
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.
Similarly
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, those who got between 25,000_49,999 were showing 30
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millions
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million
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 as well.
Besides
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 the figure of 28
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millions
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million
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 that
rated
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was rated
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 by those who gained more
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then
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than
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 100,000.
Finally
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, in 2015 the figures were mostly the same except that of those who earned more than 100,000
who
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which
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 jumped to nearly 34
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millions
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million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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