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The line graph shows the numbers of queries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The line graph shows the numbers of queries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
inquiries
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 received by the Tourist Information Office in one city from
January
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 to June 2011, categorized into in-person, telephone, and letter/email
inquiries
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.
Overall
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, the number of in-person
inquiries
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 showed a dramatic upward trend, becoming the most popular method by the end of the period.
In addition
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, the cell phone had a little increase, in the meantime, emails had a noticeable reduction. In
January
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,
inquiries
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 made in person were the least common, starting at approximately 400.
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,
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 figure rose steadily over the months, catching both letter/email and telephone
inquiries
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 by March and reaching a peak of around 1,900 in June.
This
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 sharp increase highlights a growing preference for face-to-face communication.
Inquiries
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 via mobile phone began at 900 in
January
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, making it the most popular method
initially
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. Despite a slight dip in February, the numbers rose steadily,
leveling
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 off at 1,000 in March before climbing
further
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 to 1,600 by June.
On the other hand
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, queries made by post or email consistently declined, dropping from just under 800 in
January
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 to fewer than 400 by May, where it stabilized for the remainder of the period.
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