In recent years, more and more people are choosing to live in cities rather than in rural areas. What are the reasons for this trend, and do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages?

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Nowadays, more and more individuals are choosing to live in urban

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rather than in villages There are many reasons for

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trend , but the main reason is cities have more opportunities than rural

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. In my opinion , it has more advantages than disadvantages because , [e]people can improve their life , study skills in towns so that , it has more benefits than drawbacks . [f] The main reason is that urban

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have[g] more accessibilities,

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as commuting to work easily,

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[h] facilities to study.

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, in metropolises ,

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as Almaty , Astana have[i][j] more opportunities than rural

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of the same scale as Ile region , Mangystau and more.

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, Almaty has a lot of

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schools with high quality of education.

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this

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is the main reason why people

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live

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[k] in cities. It

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[l] more positive aspects than negative

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because

, if people will move to towns , they can learn

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a variety

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of languages and skills that could be useful in the future .

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advantage is access to public transportation and

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study

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for free in establishments similar to cafes ,

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and libraries

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. [m] In summary , there is

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main cause of why people

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decisions to move to cities is

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the possibilities

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and chances to improve life skills .

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, I mentioned that it has more advantages

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accessibility to learn new things and their ability.

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You have clearly stated a reason for the trend with urbanization, which is the availability of more opportunities in cities.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

252 words

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urbanization
metropolitan areas
infrastructure
economic opportunities
educational institutions
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cultural amenities
healthcare facilities
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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to live in cities rather than in rural areas. What are the reasons for this trend, and do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

It will be better to have wide use of driverless cars for individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Students at schools and universities learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources (e.g. television, the Internet). Do you agree or disagree?

Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease, government should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many young people today spend a lot of time playing electronic games. Is this a positive or negative development?