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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The data illustrates the number of students who finished their college studies during the
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period
 from 1992
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 2007 in
canada
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Canada
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.
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, the number of both male and female college
graduates
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 during
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 time span increased, showing very similar trend lines. From 1992 to 2000, there was a plateau where the number of students finishing university did not experience any major
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fluctuations
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 the duration spanning 2000-2007 illustrated a steady rise reaching a peak in 2007. Comparing the volume of female
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 to male
graduates
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 in
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, the graph shows that there were always more female
graduates
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 compared to their male counterparts. In 1992 with around 70,000 male
graduates
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 and approximately 100,000 female
graduates
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, the difference was around 30,000 students.
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 more or less the same until the big surge that happened in 2001
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widening
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 gap year after year reaching
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approximately
 50,000 by 2007.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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