At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, the residents of many nations have a huge amount of young
people
in comparison to elder people
. This
structure presents both advantages and disadvantages. However
, I strongly believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks for the reasons described below.
One major advantage of having a large number of young people
is the
economic growthCorrect article usage
apply
,
because young adults can work Remove the comma
apply
long
and harder than older Rephrase
longer
people
and that will balance a country
's workforce. For instance
, country
named the "United States", Add an article
the country
a country
have
a vast amount of skilled young Correct subject-verb agreement
has
individuals
, because of
that Change preposition
apply
country
's business growing faster than other countries. The main reason is young people
in that country
can work more efficiently than elder people
because of that one reason the mentioned country
increasing economical
growth for young Replace the word
economic
people
.
Despite these benefits, there are many challenges due to
younger people
more
focused on modern Add a missing verb
being more
cultures
rather than traditional cultures
, because
of that traditional Correct word choice
and because
cultures
are disappearing from many countries. Older people
knows
about traditions, if older Change the verb form
know
individuals
not working
on their Wrong verb form
work
tradition
the result could lead disappearance of many traditional Fix the agreement mistake
traditions
work
. Fix the agreement mistake
works
For example
, There was a city called "Mymensingh", few
decades ago many Change the article
a few
individuals
involved
in crafting Add a missing verb
were involved
hand made
Correct your spelling
handmade
hat
, but now when they become older citizens and because of Fix the agreement mistake
hats
advancement
of technology and youth interest the tradition has been lost Correct article usage
the advancement
very
long time ago.
In conclusion, these days, some countries have a larger proportion of youth. Add an article
a very
While
, elderly people
are less in proportion, because of that many traditions has
gone forever. Correct subject-verb agreement
have
Nevertheless
, young people
bringing
Wrong verb form
bring
the
economic growth and if older Correct article usage
apply
individuals
teach younger people
how to maintain and balance traditional cultures
and modern cultures
then
, advantages
of youth Correct article usage
the advantages
doesn't
outweigh Correct subject-verb agreement
don't
disadvantages
.Correct article usage
the disadvantages
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