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The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013.

The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how
frequent
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people
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 in the USA ate in fast
food
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 restaurants over 10 years from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that in 2003 and 2006, the majority of
people
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 consumed fast
food
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 in
restaurant
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 once a week,
whereas
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 in 2013, they mostly ate it once or twice a month.
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, the rate of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 every day was the lowest over the given period. With regards to the proportion of
people
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 who consumed fast
food
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 every day, it was around 5
percent
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per cent
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 in all three years. In the case of several times a week, the consumption increased by 3% from 17% in 2003 to 20% in 2006 before falling to approximately 16 %
at the end
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.
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, in terms of once a week, the figure fluctuated between 31% and 28%.
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,
people
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 who never consumed fast
food
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 dropped by 2%.
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, the number of
people
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 who consumed once or twice a month started
about
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at about
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 30% prior to 25% in 2006, and following that, it went up to almost 33% in the
last
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 year. When it comes to the figure for a few times a year, the amount of
people
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 who consumed rose from 12% in the first to nearly 15% in 2013.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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